Irony
Bittersweet
By Mr. Intel
Reviews
Manatheron posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 10:56pm for Bittersweet
Excellent start, I can't wait to read the next chapter. Of course I'm also wondering what bit of erostatic law or magic hermoine found to help him out of this one.
Mr.Intel replied:
You got that one right. Harry's only as good as his friends and Hermione is the witch to beat in this story. Fudge doesn't know what's coming to bite him in the butt.
:D
amulder posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 10:28pm for Bittersweet
Good start, Michael. The hardest part to believe, right now, is that Fudge is getting away with his witch-hunt of Harry. I hope that will be explained a bit more later?
For instance... with the death of all those DE's, likely a lot of families had a rather unpleasant surprise when they found out that one of their loved ones was both Dead, and a DE. Much easier to believe that they were tricked, and Harry is therefore responsible.
Kingsley is a little bit surprising also, but then we really don't know that much about him.
best,
...art
Mr.Intel replied:
Very good observations, Art. Fudge isn't getting away with his witch hunt. Right now, I'm writing the bit where Hermione and co. try to see him and present their defence. We get a better picture of the outrage that's befallen his second administration. As to the 'tricked' death eater spouses, I'm taking the narrow view and supposing that Voldemort's followers are few and confined to 'evil' families. Still, that would make an interesting plot twist. :)
Kingsley knows Harry is innocent, but he's a career man. Appointed to chief auror young in his career, he's a tad bit full of himself and like Percy, has a blinded sense of morality because of his ambition. Kingsley isn't gone for good.
dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 7:49pm for Bittersweet
Not a bad start. Wondering about Bill's response tho'.
Mr.Intel replied:
Bill's being the typically overprotective older brother. He doesn't like Ginny galavanting off with Harry so recently after the war is over and while Harry is still a fugitive. He's also placing himself in the role to protect his parents from their 'rash' decisions as well. Bill makes another appearance.
Dave Harris posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 7:35pm for Bittersweet
I hesitate to say it after your note about the number of re-writes of the first part of the chapter, but to me it doesn't really flow. It feels a bit clunky. Once you get into the dialogue though, it starts to flow a lot better.
The remainder of the story is good, but it feels as though it's a summarised version of a much longer story. There's very little pause for thought between Harry's actions, or much in the way of reflection on his decisions.
I still liked it though. Harry's knowing-ness that he couldn't be restrained in Azkaban and of how to disable the "Failsafe shield" were nice touches, and it was good to see that Harry and Ginny couldn't outsmart Arthur and Molly and get married in secret.
Fudge's complete incompetence and continued persecution of Harry were also very well done (if brief).
Mr.Intel replied:
I appreciate your candor. Feedback from readers is valuable, when given in the correct light. This was one such review.
This is a very summarized story. As I alluded, I have many irons in the fire and thought it'd be fun to delve deeper into this plot, I would get lost in the undertow really fast. The only way to keep it light and fun for me is to stay on the surface for most of the story. It gets into deeper, thought still relatively shallow waters in the last part.
Thank you for reviewing.
Brad Crawford posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 5:22pm for Bittersweet
loved it but i want to know what happens to fudge when the people find out what he did to harry!
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 4:26pm for Bittersweet
Heh, that sounds so like the British Ministry we've come to know and loathe. I like the way the story is developing, though, and will be looking forward to the next part.
Life's a Dance posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 2:22pm for Bittersweet
On to the next chapter! Quickly please...This is the best spin on the Azkaban!Harry spectacle that I have ever read!
Elfguard48 posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 2:18pm for Bittersweet
Can't wait for the next part. This is very well written.
When will Fudge ever learn. Don't mess with Harrt.
HermioneGreen posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 1:19pm for Bittersweet
Awesome as always . . . i eagerly await the next chapter
'Mione
zac posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:40pm for Bittersweet
HAHAHA...that was brilliant. You could turn this into a serial story with Harry and Ginny hopping all over the eluding Fudges aurors. well done.
hoser41 posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:37pm for Bittersweet
I very much like so far.
KateHC posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:35pm for Bittersweet
Very sweet and fluffy.
Thank you for all the hours of pleasure you have given me.
David Thacker posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:30pm for Bittersweet
That was great.Thank you for this story and the time and effort that you have put in to it.Please ignore any and all flames.Enjoy your self when you write and have fun in your life when you can.
Ken Warner posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:27pm for Bittersweet
what an excellent amuse-gueule, to whet our appetites to some well deserved Ministry bashing and Harry-Ginny fluff.
Thanks
Machiavelli Jr posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 11:40pm for Bittersweet