By Mr. Intel
Reviews
Sean Dillon posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 7:05am
Interesting twist appointing Harry as Minister. Anothe nice bit of fluff from you.
Thanks
Rowan Mikaio posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 6:15am
fweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
*heartlove*
Treck posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 5:57am
LOVE IT!
Christopher Estep posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 5:54am
Harry *does* realize he got *mousetrapped*, doesn't he? Not by Fudge....but by *Hermione Granger*. Fudge's case fell apart worse than a hand of Exploding Snap made with C-4 (and a heck of a lot faster), and I wouldn't have put it past Hermione to have set up Harry by setting up Fudge. Hermione knew Fudge had to go, and that the ONLY person likely to be able to put the Ministry back together the RIGHT way after tearing it down didn't WANT the bloody job (basically, Harry). The Prophecy Harry referred to was made by Sybil Trelawney in OotP (in front of Harry, Ron, and a shocked Umbridge). The best way to tell a lie is to tell just enough of the truth.....then shut up. Still, the idea of killing Riddle with a Cheering Charm...utterly priceless!
Mr.Intel replied:
If he does, he loves Hermione too much to lay into her for it. Perhaps Harry's inner Slytherin is glad to have the reigns of the Wizarding world so he can put things to rights. Whatever his reasoning, I'm glad someone figured this out. Hermione has her own ambitions and getting Harry the post lets her have the ear of the Minister while not being thrust into the limelight directly. Pretty smart witch, eh?
Thanks for the great review!
--M
Philipe posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 4:19am
Like it.. It's strange that this is close to an oneshot, and iet it feels like a long story.. in the good way of course.. the only thing i found strange was the spell or order that Fudge had to have the same treatment as H. I don't know.. just strange.. For the rest, congrats.. and love the ending profecy..
P.
KateHC posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 4:15am
Very cute. Twelve Kids?
Dave Harris posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 3:48am
Excellent conclusion to this little arc. This flowed a lot better and tied things together nicely. Shame Harry had to interrupt his honeymoon to get himself cleared, but Hermione just wasn't going to let things rest until she'd successfully defended him, was she?
I thought you might have a little more of a stand-off between Ginny and Molly about having a more formal wedding, but even without it, the story rounded off nicely. Thank you.
Lira posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 3:01am
*chuckles* Good one! More like this, please! :)
RainingFlowers posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 2:28am
Wow. an amazing end to this short story... Harry becoming Minister was something that I didn't see coming, I can tell you that! I like the honeymoon thing as well... 'We went on honeymoon for a week, then we had to come back so that the new husband could go back to prison and then attend a trial, then, the week after that, we were back in our honeymoon!' ha! Love it!
I liked the Wizengamot deliberation as well!
Patches posted a comment on Tuesday 16th May 2006 1:55am
I really like this story. Leave it to Fudge to mess up the demise of Voldemort and prosecute the savior of the Wizarding World! I would like to see Harry and Ginny married and happy in a place where they want to live. Thank you for writing. Please continue! pms
Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Monday 15th May 2006 12:59pm
Very fun story so far! Leave it to Fudge to be this much of an idiot!
Kinsfire posted a comment on Thursday 11th May 2006 5:56am
I do hope that there is more planned of this.
I will admit to some vindictiveness, hoping the Fudge gets some nice pleasant prison time, as well as the warden at the prison, who is obviously in Fudge's employ. That assumes that Fudge survives the public's displeasure on finding out that Harry was made into a criminal and forced to leave the country - forever, as far as they're concerned.
Must you write so well? *laugh*
Mr.Intel replied:
You just may get your vindictive wish. I'm wrapping up the bulk of the next segment now and Fudge doesn't get off scott free ;) I'm a happy-ending kind of guy!
Graup posted a comment on Sunday 7th May 2006 1:14pm
Excellent start to the story.
Thanks for sharing it.
J User posted a comment on Monday 1st May 2006 10:40pm
Depressing but true - if Fudge were to get back into power, killing Voldemort would be the simple part for Harry. (Not easy, mind you, but at least it's something for which you can easily tell when you've succeeded.) Politics, and the court of public opinion, are much more tricky.
Fudge's behaviour seems a little unusual - you'd think he'd have better political survival instincts than to do something that gets the public in an uproar - but I can certainly see him getting that obsessed with revenge. (It's not just that he was wrong, it's that Harry [i]publically exposed[/i] him as being wrong, which makes it personal.) It's also probably true that with the attitude displayed by the wizarding public in the books, they'd probably forget about Harry if Fudge could manage to keep him out of sight for a few months...
Travel notes: Auckland is a good city to do touristy things in, but not such a great place to stay longer-term. (I don't know which you're planning; I guess it'd depend on how long Harry and Ginny are expecting to be gone.) It's kind of like Los Angeles in that it has the "great sprawling soulless impersonal city" feel; it's more a bunch of sub-districts than a single cohesive city.
Wellington or Christchurch feel smaller and more like a community - they're a lot smaller in population, of course, but that's not the only factor involved. Christchurch also has a strong English influence (for that familiar feeling), and the Wizard (a possible tie to the NZ magical community).
(Disclaimer: These are not unbiased opinions - I live in Wellington. You might also want to look at Paracelsus' fic Restitution: much of it takes place in New Zealand, and he's done a lot of research for the details.)
brad: Yes. Yes, you do keep bringing that up. National pride is all very well, but how about we keep the main focus to the actual story, okay? Trans-Tasman jealousy is going to mean sod all to most US- or UK-based people.
Mr.Intel replied:
Very good information. I've not been to New Zealand (or anywhere outside of North America or Hawaii) so I'm definitely not an expert, but I have done some research. Part Two features the results of that research, though the scene in New Zealand isn't all that big a part of the story, so I didn't have to spend too long at it. ;)
Thank you for taking the time to comment on my story!
brad posted a comment on Sunday 30th April 2006 7:15pm
What the BLOODY HELL!?!?!?!?
"Too boring"!?!?!?
Not only that, but New Zealand ... *choke* ... "perfect"?? NEW ZEALAND!?!?!
Arrrghh!
I tell you what, if nothing else catches up with Ginny I'll be joining the queue to teach her a geography lesson. Harrumph.
I'm afraid you've displayed a horrible lack of authorial knowledge ... or maybe just good taste ... in your penning of this story. If you care to step down to this hemisphere I'm sure there's any number of non-boring Australians who would be glad to assist you in realising your error.
All in :-)
This story was entertaining but didn't quite make sense to me (and that was before the jibe at Australia at the end). Fudge and the ministry were so stupid, their actions so far-fetched, as to seem farcical. No way would the aurors, the entire Ministry, facilitate Harry's imprisonment right after his vanquishing Voldemort like this. This isn't a comedy though, is it? Although that would explain the selection of New Zealand, hmmm ...
After reading this story I was a bit peeved at Ginny ... after all, she really didn't do anything to help Harry escape, unlike Ron & Hermione. Just a few smirks before his escape. Yet she says that Harry 'needed her' ... what for? Certainly she's bollocks as a Travel Agent ...
(I keep on bringing that up, don't I?)
So, what exciting scenes are you writing for Chapter 2, where we have the newly wedded couple sojourning in ... *choke* ... New Zealand? Harry and Ginny meet some sheep? Climb some mountains (to escape the sheep)?
Mr.Intel replied:
Someplace had to get the raw end of the stick. Having been to none of the listed countries, I had to pick one. Wanting to go to all of them, I chose New Zealand because it's the furthest English-speaking nation from England (that I know of). That, and you get every kind of climate in a very small space. ;)
Perhaps I need to write a story featuring all the wonderful attributes of Australia? :P
Don posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 11:48pm
Wow!!!
That is all I can say. You have a gift for story telling. Thank you for sharing that gift with the world.
Sovran posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 10:41pm
Excellent story, as usual. I look forward to the next installment.
One technical note:He didn’t say a word as they dragged him to Azkaban, placing him ironically in the one that once held his godfather
This sentence is very awkward. Strictly speaking, 'one' is an indefinite pronoun reference, though it's not hard to figure out that you're talking about a cell. An easy fix would be to just replace the word 'one' with 'same cell'. I think you might also need to change the tense of 'held' to 'had held', but that difference is so tiny that I didn't notice it on my first or second reads of the sentence.
That aside, you are hopefully aware that your writing, along with everything else on this site, is better written (technically and artistically) than 99.5% of the fanfiction on the net. Heck, it's better than 99% of everything on the net. Keep it up!
Patches posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 4:30pm
This is a great beginning to a great story. I really like the way Harry escaped. He didn't hurt anyone who didn't try to hurt him first and then he did as little as possible. I'm glad he and Ginny are married and the Molly and Arthur were able to be there. Thanks so much for writing this. Please write more and thanks to Kokopelli also!pms
Zarz posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 12:00pm
I love this! You are so right that killing Voldemort would never be the end of Harry's troubles. I can't wait for the next installment and Harry's further adventures. Keep up the good work!
zac posted a comment on Wednesday 17th May 2006 9:39am