By Mr. Intel
Reviews
Prince Charon posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 4:41am
OK, is Fudge trying to get himself kicked out of office, again?
Interesting, though.
Mr.Intel replied:
Short answer, no. He's become so obsessed with locking Harry up 'for the good of the wizarding world' that he can't see anything else.
c3markh posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 3:50am
Love the start of this story. Thanks for writing and I will be looking forward to the next update.
millercommamatt posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 1:51am
I like what you're written so far, It's a great balance between drama and fun, action and fluff, joy and gloom. I'm curious as to what your reasonings for Kingsly are, but I suspect that we'll find out in later installments. I'd also like to see what the public outcry for Harry, if existant, was like. Anyway, thanks for writing. Have fun writing more!
-millercommamatt
Philipe posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 12:40am
Didn't anyone thought of alerting the rest of the trio about H. escape? And the wedding for that mather?
Like it, but there seems to be something odd about Ginny, but i really can't tell what.. And i thought that your Kinsley was odd as well.. For someone that was in an ilegalm organization, he looks too much by the book..
This sounds like a flame doesn't it? It really isn't, because a really like it, but i usualy notices the things that bothers me first..
H. in the ministry was really fun, you should make me laught at work, you gonna get me in trouble..
See ya.
P.
saugart posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 12:19am
This was a pleasure to read. Thanks for a nice Mr. Intel story, without slash or smut!
I am glad to find this. And thanks to Kokopelli for helping you with it.
RainingFlowers posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 12:11am
aawww, sweet.
A great story so far, but when are Ron and Hermione going to find out about Harry's escape and his and Ginny's marriage?
Mr.Intel replied:
Patience young grasshopper. The next part will reveal all. ;)
Dustin Hoeppner posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 12:11am
I like this story
Dustin
Machiavelli Jr posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 11:40pm
Interesting, so far. I like the idea of Fudge shooting himself so thoroughly in the foot, though I do think he'd know enough to contruct really foolproof charges. Destruction of national heirlooms, manslaughter and whatever covers 'raising and leading a private army' are all pretty accurate descriptions. Why does Fudge hate Harry so much though? Being a complete opportunist, he should be running up to Harry like his best friend. Still, can't wait for more of this [or any of your WIPs, in fact]. KUTGW!
Manatheron posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 10:56pm
Excellent start, I can't wait to read the next chapter. Of course I'm also wondering what bit of erostatic law or magic hermoine found to help him out of this one.
Mr.Intel replied:
You got that one right. Harry's only as good as his friends and Hermione is the witch to beat in this story. Fudge doesn't know what's coming to bite him in the butt.
:D
amulder posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 10:28pm
Good start, Michael. The hardest part to believe, right now, is that Fudge is getting away with his witch-hunt of Harry. I hope that will be explained a bit more later?
For instance... with the death of all those DE's, likely a lot of families had a rather unpleasant surprise when they found out that one of their loved ones was both Dead, and a DE. Much easier to believe that they were tricked, and Harry is therefore responsible.
Kingsley is a little bit surprising also, but then we really don't know that much about him.
best,
...art
Mr.Intel replied:
Very good observations, Art. Fudge isn't getting away with his witch hunt. Right now, I'm writing the bit where Hermione and co. try to see him and present their defence. We get a better picture of the outrage that's befallen his second administration. As to the 'tricked' death eater spouses, I'm taking the narrow view and supposing that Voldemort's followers are few and confined to 'evil' families. Still, that would make an interesting plot twist. :)
Kingsley knows Harry is innocent, but he's a career man. Appointed to chief auror young in his career, he's a tad bit full of himself and like Percy, has a blinded sense of morality because of his ambition. Kingsley isn't gone for good.
dogbertcarroll posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 7:49pm
Not a bad start. Wondering about Bill's response tho'.
Mr.Intel replied:
Bill's being the typically overprotective older brother. He doesn't like Ginny galavanting off with Harry so recently after the war is over and while Harry is still a fugitive. He's also placing himself in the role to protect his parents from their 'rash' decisions as well. Bill makes another appearance.
Dave Harris posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 7:35pm
I hesitate to say it after your note about the number of re-writes of the first part of the chapter, but to me it doesn't really flow. It feels a bit clunky. Once you get into the dialogue though, it starts to flow a lot better.
The remainder of the story is good, but it feels as though it's a summarised version of a much longer story. There's very little pause for thought between Harry's actions, or much in the way of reflection on his decisions.
I still liked it though. Harry's knowing-ness that he couldn't be restrained in Azkaban and of how to disable the "Failsafe shield" were nice touches, and it was good to see that Harry and Ginny couldn't outsmart Arthur and Molly and get married in secret.
Fudge's complete incompetence and continued persecution of Harry were also very well done (if brief).
Mr.Intel replied:
I appreciate your candor. Feedback from readers is valuable, when given in the correct light. This was one such review.
This is a very summarized story. As I alluded, I have many irons in the fire and thought it'd be fun to delve deeper into this plot, I would get lost in the undertow really fast. The only way to keep it light and fun for me is to stay on the surface for most of the story. It gets into deeper, thought still relatively shallow waters in the last part.
Thank you for reviewing.
Brad Crawford posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 5:22pm
loved it but i want to know what happens to fudge when the people find out what he did to harry!
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 4:26pm
Heh, that sounds so like the British Ministry we've come to know and loathe. I like the way the story is developing, though, and will be looking forward to the next part.
Life's a Dance posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 2:22pm
On to the next chapter! Quickly please...This is the best spin on the Azkaban!Harry spectacle that I have ever read!
Elfguard48 posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 2:18pm
Can't wait for the next part. This is very well written.
When will Fudge ever learn. Don't mess with Harrt.
HermioneGreen posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 1:19pm
Awesome as always . . . i eagerly await the next chapter
'Mione
zac posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:40pm
HAHAHA...that was brilliant. You could turn this into a serial story with Harry and Ginny hopping all over the eluding Fudges aurors. well done.
hoser41 posted a comment on Tuesday 25th April 2006 12:37pm
I very much like so far.
freakyfinger posted a comment on Wednesday 26th April 2006 8:36am