Jonathan Northwood posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 1:01pm for Ginny

This is an interesting take on the Redo proposition. I'm looking forward to seeing how it plays out.

As always, delightfully written.

Carol Layland posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 12:30pm for Ginny

Hello Mr. Intel, I am a great fan of all the authors here on Fanficauthor.net and I am so glad to read your newest story. It is very hard to review a new story but I do believe that you have a wonderful winner here. I enjoy stories that involve time travel especially if they are well conceived and planned before being committed to a readable source. I do hope that you will post often and consistently for this story as I enjoyed the prologue and chapter 1 very much.

Mr.Intel replied:

Thank you.   I plan to post as often as I can.   I have a good plot for the second year and I hope that it will allow for a good third year and beyond.

morriganscrow posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 10:42am for Ginny

Whilst I usually detest the Harry/Ginny pairing, you are making her a much more well-rounded character already than she ever was in the books - so I'll follow this story.

Mr.Intel replied:

That's high praise.   I hope that my Ginny fits your expectations because she's not going to just accept everything that comes her way.   Thanks for reviewing.

kate19 posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 7:39am for Ginny

i like it!! it's a really nice to start this story at second year. and i also like that harry is so honest with dumbledore and the start of the harry/ginny relationship is also nicely done so far. bye

John Davis posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 4:35am for Ginny

that can of worms is one of the reasons most people don't want to have him tell anyone when he returns.
In my own, Harry will slowly tell everyone, but finds tells Dumbledore and Arthur at the earliest possible oppertunity.
a good start none the less.
hope to see more of this one soon.

Bob Joyce posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 12:27am for Ginny

Please please finish this one eh. So many unfinished novels out on the web.

Mr.Intel replied:

I promise to finish it at least through third year.   That's all I have planned for now.   It is my hope to finish until Harry "Makes It Right".   :)

Katherine Summers posted a comment on Friday 26th September 2008 5:05pm for Ginny

I think you're doing great so far on the redo. It's different and a nice change.

jilumasam posted a comment on Friday 26th September 2008 11:02am for Ginny

That's actually a pretty good start. I like the fact your having Harry be relatively open about his past.

Looking forward to the next chapter!

Anthony May posted a comment on Friday 26th September 2008 6:46am for Ginny

Oh, I love "Re-do's" and if anyone can handle the difficulties and make it epic - You are the Man!

Ravenclawchaser68 posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 11:13pm for Ginny

Not a bad start. It definitely is different from Viridian's story to have Harry be open with everyone from the beginning. I don't think I've seen anything quite like it. I do think it was a good idea to cut out the first year entirely, especially since you seem to be focusing on Harry's relationship with Ginny. I'm looking forward to seeing how you keep the story moving through their years at Hogwarts.
Thanks for writing,
Jay

sugarbear68 posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 11:01pm for Ginny

WOW! I generally enjoy "do over" stories and this one is starting out wonderfully!!! Harry gets the diary away from Ginny with minimal fuss and anger. (I always hate it when people let her suffer the entire year using "the trauma molds her into the person she's to become" excuse. Jo refers in her writings how Ginny was always a strong individual, personally and magically. I've always wondered if the whole diary episode didn't set her back somewhat.) Harry's using and sharing his knowledge responsibly -- talking to Dumbledore, disabling the cabinet, explaining to Ginny. I'm really looking forward to where you're going to go with this. Can't wait for another installment. Keep up the good work!

Bob Officer posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 10:42pm for Ginny

Nice.

I want to see the rest of the replay come out.

I am interested in how the tri-wizard tourney works.

James Barber posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 4:12pm for Ginny

Hey I too like and read and for the most part agree with some of the things your first a/n said about redo hp fics...I also am quite tired of strictly canon and agree with you on how many times he boards hogwarts express etc... I also like the way this is going, but dont you think bring a 11 yr old ginny into this abruptly like he did is a little too much!

Memory King posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 10:16am for Ginny

This one is pretty neat, liked the fact that you didn't hesitate with taking th Diary out of the equation.

The only possible problem with the story could be Harry's willingness to share his future memories it makes it possible for enemies to pick that knowledge up. But I also appreciate how you intend to travel untainted waters, so I guess it all evens out.

What has HP planned with Wormtail?

Looking forward to more!

Mrs.TiffanyPotter posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 9:59am for Ginny

Great begining. Harry Accepts the situation a little to easily IMO. Harry wakes up in his younger body and imediatly concludes that he has time traveled. It would have made more sense to me if Harry had taken some time to asses the situation before comming to that conclusion.

I like that Harry informed Dumbledore of the situation as soon as he could. While some people might think it OOC that Harry tells Ginny before telling Ron and Hermione we have to remember that this Harry was a Married man and it's only natural that he would trust his wife, or her younger self, more then his two best friends especially if they were dead in the furture as the prolog implied.

A great begining. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Jderig posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 9:13am for Ginny

Oooo, an honest dimensional traveling Harry! I've never seen one of those before, or at least one that I felt was memorable. I like how this story has started, good luck with the rest!

Patches posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 8:25am for Ginny

This is an excellent beginning to a great story. I really like Viridian's story but I know what you mean about it being a little dark. I look forward to what you pland to do with this story and I am also enjoying the Master of Life. I hope you plan to continue both to their conclusions. pms

perspicacity posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 5:04am for Ginny

This second chapter certainly sets things in motion.

Like essentially all the writing I've encountered on this site, your characters are organic and your writing is solid.

I think the premise for your "way-back machine" story is reasonable--it's a bit of a peeve of mine to encounter stories where Harry goes back and basically doesn't do anything differently except maybe be a slightly better friend to a few people along the way.

That said, it's still not a completely original concept, as I've read several stories where Harry confides immediately in at least a subset of Dumbledore, Snape, various Weasleys, and others upon his return. DeadWoodpecker just finished one (Backward with Purpose); another lesser fic with some of the same ideas is Maxfic's Harry Potter and the Time Mage (not a very good story, but one with some common elements). I'll be interested in seeing how yours distinguishes itself from others in this crowded field.

I'd expect Dumbledore to encourage Harry to keep limited the number of people with whom he confides, if only because it would make him a target for former Death Eaters and the Ministry alike. (They have a huge hall devoted to prophecy; what about someone who actually experienced the future firsthand and can articulate it clearly and answer questions? Besides, spreading this knowledge will open the question why he's even at Hogwarts as a second year when he should be taking his NEWT examinations.

Also, I'm concerned about Harry's relationship with Ginny at this stage, since she's 11 and he's an adult (in terms of mental maturity, as evinced by his behavior both at the Burrow--for the most part, anyway--and in Dumbledore's office, especially); this would strain most adults' moral compasses and I think anything more than friendship between the two should pose a problem for Harry too, at least until Ginny's of age.

You seem to have a decent story going so far, one which I'll keep up with. I just hope you won't suffer the fate of so many do-over story authors *cough* Matthew *cough* and lose steam before you finish. While it's a crowded field, the list of good, complete stories in the genre is quite short, indeed. I'm sure if you complete yours, it will be among the finest.

Thanks for writing!

Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 2:49am for Ginny

This looks like it's going to be quite the interesting "re-do" story with Harry working from the get-go to let those who matter know what he's doing and why. I'll be looking forward to future chapters.

BJH posted a comment on Thursday 25th September 2008 2:15am for Ginny

Hmm, this does seem like an interesting take on the Re-do concept. I always like your stories so I am looking forward to seeing how this one goes.

Let me ask you a question: When Dumbledore asks Harry and Ginny to remove the ribbons you made a point of telling us that she quickly took them back and put them in her pocket, does this have some significance?

Will the ribbons have some sort of meaning to Ginny with regards to her feelings for Harry? Or perhaps it shows a cute quirk in her prsonality having been raised poor. Did she learn from Molly that you waste nothing? Is she the type of person who saves wrapping paper in order to reuse it? That could be an adorable/annoy quirk to Harry as the story progresses. Harry in a rush to catch some DE and Ginny stopping to pick up some little thing that Harry discarded because "Hey! That might come in handy sometime!" Then when the chips arre down and Harry is frustrated because he needs something, Ginny can pull it out of her bag and say "See? I told you!"

BJH

Mr.Intel replied:

Ah, BJ.   You always know how to make an author smile.   That little line was written as a one off, but when I re-read it the other day, I had some similar thoughts as you regarding her feelings for Harry.   As to the pack-rat mentality... I'm married to one, so I can easily see how Ginny would be that way.   If nothing else, it could make for some extra characterization in the future.

Thanks for reviewing!