By Mr. Intel
Reviews
jilumasam posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 8:15am
Thanks for the update! I like this chapter!
Seems as though Hermione is always portrayed as an overachieving questioner with no regard for others feelings.... :)
Looking forward to the next chapter!
amulder posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 5:42am
Hmm, Michael, But Fawkes was approaching his burning day, wasn't he? Was he even capable of this at this point? I dunno. When actually was the burning day in the book? If it isn't for a few months, then thats fine, but then why is Fawkes looking bedraggled?
Otherwise it's interesting to see things progress.
Mr.Intel replied:
Art,
Fawkes burned toward the middle of the book, when Hagrid brought in the roosters and swore Harry didn't do it... I reverse extrapolated so that Fawkes was bedraggled, but not approaching death.
Memory King posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 5:01am
Liked this one quite a lot, will be extremely interesting to see what Malfoy does about this.
How many fangs does Dumbledore intend to sell, and has he considered the possible consequences of this action?
Looking forward to more!
hedwig_edwiges posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 4:08am
Not a word about Ginny's sorting?
Mr.Intel replied:
I guess that would have been important, eh? Thanks.
avram posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 2:54am
Good thus far.
Your previous/next links aren't working right, as far as I can tell. They seem to take me to the same page I'm already on. It works to select the chapter from the dropdown menu.
Mr.Intel replied:
It seems to be that way for all three chapters, not just the updated one. I have sent this to Jeconais to work on.
Thanks for letting me know!
--M
Evan Mayerle posted a comment on Friday 3rd October 2008 1:28am
*snicker* Well, the Chamber/basilisk situation has been defused, but I daresay that Lcuius Malfoy will have other plans to put into play to discredit/destroy those he deems his enemies. Meanwhile, I most certainly hope that matters work out 'tween Harry and Ginny on this go-'round.
GinnyLover posted a comment on Thursday 2nd October 2008 1:48am
Wow!! Really nice!
Cant wait for more!
Amamama posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2008 6:52am
Very promising, and I'm sure neither Harry nor you have opened a bigger can of worms than you're able to handle. I'm looking forward to the next parts, and I must admit that I like that Harry is so open about being ten years older than he is - and that there'll be no Dumbledore bashing. And him and Ginny - they're just sweet. I imagine it must be hard to hold back, but I also imagine that his 22 year old self doesn't find an 11-year old as attractive as the more mature Ginny he originally wed. Lots of possibilities here for awkward situations - and for righting some wrongs. Hope he gets Sirius out OK...
jmerlin61 posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2008 6:11am
Well this is my first review in 4 years of reading fanfiction. I must commend you on a truly believable and unique approach to the "re-do" plot line. Harry's explaination to Dumbledore showed that he unintentionally returned and is willing to work with Dumbledor.
It will be interesting to see how they both work on the changes to the timeline and which changes will be allowed by Dumbledor. I can only foresee a problem with Sirius Black's early release due to the protection at 4 Privet drive. Cudo's to your story and I look forward to the next chapter.
Mr.Intel replied:
I'm honored to be the recipient of your first review in so long. We'll just have to see what happens with the Sirius-Dursley's-Dumbledore triangle. ;)
Lynn Terald posted a comment on Monday 29th September 2008 2:18am
Very creative. I'm very impressed with the pace that you chose to set with this story. You don't linger over the old details but you don't rush through them either and the way you weave your own story into it is amazing. I'm definetly going to keep a look out for this story in the future.
Asad posted a comment on Sunday 28th September 2008 7:37am
Interesting start...
I am curious to see what direction you take this story to...
yentila22 posted a comment on Sunday 28th September 2008 6:17am
I love all your work and I can't wait to see where you take this story.
Tiffls posted a comment on Sunday 28th September 2008 3:01am
This is a great start. I can't wait to read more.
Thanks for writing!
bookaholic_au posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 9:28pm
""It all started five years from now," he began, deliberately mixing his verb tenses. "Lord Voldemort had returned and it was the final battle at Hogwarts. Or... it should have been the final battle, but something went wrong and it set me on a course that landed me here." Harry stopped, not wanting to go into the whole discussion about Horcruxes in front of Ginny. He also needed to give Dumbledore some bonafides after he dropped this very large bombshell on him.
Ginny was holding her breath and was squeezing Harry’s hand to the point of pain. "Ten years from now, I caused an explosion with my magical core that wiped out the Death Eaters and Voldemort, and... my own body. It happened in the ruins of The Burrow, at the topmost room, exactly over the spot I used to spend the night on a camp bed."
There's something strange about these paragraphs. By the dates, I assume you are talking about two separate conflicts, however while you introduce the first one (the 'final' battle at Hogwarts) the confrontation at the Burrow is not properly introduced and the reader is forced to try to guess your meaning. I would appreciate seeing this cleared up - it's a really promising story, I love redo fics and I really enjoy reading your work and so I look forward to reading the next installment (however please do not neglect 'Master of Life'). Thanks for yet another billiant fic!
Mr.Intel replied:
I promise not to neglect Master of Life. As to the confusion you pointed out, I have not provided my beta with an opportunity to revise any of this story, so when she has time, I'll be sure to get this bit cleared up. Thanks!
Lottii posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 9:09pm
Hi I like how its going so far and would definitely like to read more..... Cheers
lottii
LeprechaunJV posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 4:09pm
Ah good start, look forward to updates.....
Cheers...
Christina C. Keimig posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 2:58pm
I'd say it's off to a brilliant start! I can't wait to read more!
fryman posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 2:26pm
It's an interesting premise, and has a good bit of potential for a new spin on a theme. However, you've over-sold Viridian's originality -- he was far from the first to start the "re-do" fic series. MaxFic, for example, wrote a lengthy and complete re-do fic long before Viridian came around, and it was completed nearly a year before the first chapter of NoFP was posted anywhere in any form. I believe there were shorter, though less worthwhile, efforts even before MaxFic's work. That said, I'd agree Viridian's writing quality and attention to detail defined "the bar" for many knock-offs to emulate (or attempt to).
Mr.Intel replied:
Yes. I've been educated on the history of the re-do and what I should have said was that NoFP began the sub-genre's popularity. Ah well, even though I cheated by starting in second year, perhaps we can race to the finish? ;-)
Jonathan Northwood posted a comment on Saturday 27th September 2008 1:01pm
This is an interesting take on the Redo proposition. I'm looking forward to seeing how it plays out.
As always, delightfully written.
MarinePotterfan posted a comment on Saturday 4th October 2008 4:19am