By Mr. Intel
Reviews
Carol Layland posted a comment on Wednesday 20th August 2008 3:16am
I definitely like this chapter. It shows all the doubts and questions that all brides and grooms have just before their wedding and just how they seem to feel, a little lost, a bit ambivalent and yet with a determination that all will turn out well. I wait eagerly for the next posting. Please make it quick. Carol
BJH posted a comment on Wednesday 20th August 2008 1:31am
Quite a sweet wedding, the mirrors were an interesting symbolic touch. Too bad Crackpot, err Crackshot, had to spoil the reception, at least you held him off till later so as not to spoil the whole party.
I do have three things that struck my imagination. In reverse order of appearance:
1. If Dawlish is no longer an Auror but a personal body guard of the Minister then how could he possibly arrest Harry? Crackpot, sorry there goes that slip again, Crackshot seems to be stretching quite a few laws, eh?
2. I wonder what Xeno wanted to talk to Harry about? Was it just an apology, or perhaps some information about the Hallows that will be vital later?
3. Finally, that pleasant image of the fat bumblebee flying in and landing on a balloon to watch the ceremony... Bumblebee??? Nah, it couldn't be. But is it someone we know or someone we will be meeting later? Or was it just a pleasant little image?
BJH
Mr.Intel replied:
Crackshot is like Fudge in that he feels he has the right to stretch whichever laws need stretching to get what he wants. We only have a glimmer of what he wants so far.
Xenophilius wants to complete his quest for the Deathly Hallows, as hinted in DH. Fortunately for Harry, he has no sinister motives.
The Bumblebee was just a pleasant image, reminding us and Harry of Dumbledore, who would be very pleased to see Harry and Ginny getting married.
Gena posted a comment on Tuesday 19th August 2008 12:56am
i hope you update soon i like this alot and i wonder what ginny has in mind
Anthony May posted a comment on Monday 18th August 2008 12:10pm
I love this story! Please stop the agonizing teasing with Ron and Hermoine and have them get engaged already...please...for me... - Please update soon, I'm hooked!
UlrichScheper posted a comment on Monday 18th August 2008 4:56am
I would like to comment this:
So like Dumbledore planning his own death, it's my theory that if Harry willingly decides to spar with someone and loses, the wand would know that it was "planned" enough that it doesn't change allegiances. Does that make sense?
I think that magic in HP is essentially based on intention. A good hint to that was given by JKR in the Ministry-fight where Harry tried to crucio Bellatrix, and she told him that for the spell in to work he had to mean it. That shows clearly that the intention is the essential thing. This is also visible in a lot of other Examples, see the Patronus where the Form of the Patronus is individual and represents something from the mind of the caster.
UlrichScheper posted a comment on Monday 18th August 2008 4:40am
So, you did it again! After forcing me to read "Consequences of the Hearth" in one go, and then C O t Mind - wich you did not finish aargh! - I ´m now glued to Master of Life.
As usual with your Stories, I can ´t stop reading. At least until there is nothing left to read...
So, keep going. I ´ve read fanfiction since years, and there ist simply very little das comes close to your level of writing.
Finishing the Consequences Trilogie would be highly appreciated!
Gest wishes from Germany!
Sonicdale posted a comment on Monday 18th August 2008 2:25am
Wow.
I'm in a Author Note.
And my vacation has addled my brain. I can't recall how I was inspiring. But I'll take the kudos and run.
Liked the scene. "Stop trying to hex me and hex me!" was great. Would have loved to see someone else's reaction to the sparring.
Good work with the Martha lady. You're stacking the deck for a great next few chapters. Next, you'll be using a few more movie scenes. Hm. What would work here? Maybe a few "embarrasing Ginny" photos dragged out by Molly? :)
Good work.
Mr.Intel replied:
Of course you were mentioned in an author's note. It was your idea! It was much fun to write as the other short story, so it was a pleasure.
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Saturday 16th August 2008 11:52am
Very good chapter.
gunny
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Saturday 16th August 2008 2:17am
Good chapter.
gunny
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Saturday 16th August 2008 1:59am
Good chapter. Why doesn't Harry tell the MOM to kiss off and that he is an idoit?
gunny
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Saturday 16th August 2008 1:21am
Good chapter.
gunny
TxA_GunFighter posted a comment on Friday 15th August 2008 2:23pm
Good start.
gunny
Carol Layland posted a comment on Thursday 14th August 2008 9:48am
Hi Mr. Intel, This was a lovely chapter all full of the pathos of lost love and tha angst of young love. I do think that there are many things that are between the lines here and as a mature adult they are fairly easy to percieve. I hope that you allow Ginny to understand that she must allow her parents to give her this wedding as it will complete the childhood ties that envolve any parent child relationship and get their adult relationship off to a proper start. Carol
brad posted a comment on Wednesday 13th August 2008 12:52pm
The link to your forum doesn't work for me.
Hmmm. I find myself struggling to accept just why Ginny, barely 17 years old, if that, is marrying Harry in the first place. Oh, that's right. Her mother half-pushed them into it so they could have a holiday overseas. It all seems rather extreme to me, and embodying a disproportionate sense of priorities. That thought just occurred to me on reading this. Shucks, Ginny hadn't even thought of the cost of the wedding ... is she ready for the life-long commitment of matrimony? At age 16?!
> Harry left the Elder Wand in his regular robes and wondered idly if losing in a sparring match would transfer its allegiance to his opponent. He somehow doubted that.
Convenient!!! Why would the Elder Wand discern any difference between a 'sparring match' and a bonafide fight? Disarmed to a superior opponent is disarmed to a superior opponent?!
Mr.Intel replied:
I'll check on the forum link.
The reason both Ginny and Harry accept the marriage is summed up by Harry in chapter three:
"I want you to come with me, Ginny and there’s never going to be any one else, so we might as well..."
Basically, they know that they love each other more than the average 16/17 year old. They know they aren't going to love anyone else, so it makes just as much sense to get married now as it does to get married later. Does that mean they have a wealth of marriage sense? Definitely not, and that will be manifest in later chapters.
For the Elder Wand... It doesn't discern in and of itself, but it chooses the wizard. Consider Harry's words in "Flaw" from DH...
" Dumbledore’s death was planned between them! Dumbledore intended to die, undefeated, the wand’s last true master! If all had gone as planned, the wand’s power would have died with him, because it had never been won from him!"
So like Dumbledore planning his own death, it's my theory that if Harry willingly decides to spar with someone and loses, the wand would know that it was "planned" enough that it doesn't change allegiances. Does that make sense?
warpwizard posted a comment on Wednesday 13th August 2008 8:47am
Heh, nice Matrix homage. :)
Anthony May posted a comment on Saturday 9th August 2008 3:50pm
Finally, a continuation after DH! I am enjoying this story immensely and hope you update soon. PLEASE end the stress and tension between Ron and Hermione. Ron has grown up quite a bit since the final battle and I don't believe he would still be so thick concerning her. Thanks for a great read - hurry up and update!
Carol Layland posted a comment on Friday 8th August 2008 5:34am
Hi, I enjoy every bit of writing that you do. I am well familiar with the various wording that is quoted here and I really noted that your interstiched wording was seamless and thus very well done. As a retired English teacher I especially appreciated a job of this type when it is well done and you have done it most professionally. A truly beaut-iful joy of this type of writing. I do believe that you are one of my favorite authors.
Mr.Intel replied:
You don't know how much this review means to me. I'm very grateful that you took the time to let me know how you liked my little story.
Thanks!
--M
Patches posted a comment on Friday 8th August 2008 3:35am
This is an excellent chapter. I really like the way you intergrated cannon into your story to make a more complete picture. I am not surprised that Ginny is impressed by Harry's actions and is not going to stop loving him because of his past. I look forward to more of this story. pms
Mr.Intel replied:
Thank you so much, Patches!
bookaholic_au posted a comment on Wednesday 6th August 2008 7:17pm
I must admit, I was a little disappointed in this chapter. While the first two scenes were vital events, they do not contain the sort of things that Harry might need to show Ginny before their marriage. In my opinion they dampened the effect of the final scene, which should have been the most dramatic. Although they created plenty of opportunity for Ginny to awe and ah over Harry, they do not say anything meaningful about either of the characters or their relationship.
I suppose that the only reason I'm being so critical is because this is such a departure from your ordinary excellence.
Mr.Intel replied:
I'm okay with your criticism and welcome it with open arms. In writing this story, I am balancing several plots together and having some be the focus while others are slowly heating up. The trick (which I haven't learned successfully yet) is to have that process appear seamless. The scenes that Harry is showing Ginny are necessary for the plot(s) to unfold. Ginny, Harry, and the reader need to have these "canon refreshes" in order for future scenes to make sense.
Thanks for reading.
UlrichScheper posted a comment on Wednesday 20th August 2008 5:53am