Sonicdale posted a comment on Tuesday 21st March 2006 1:54pm

Wow, man. You've either been in Harry's shoes (clueless when it comes to women) or have watched enough guys crash and burn. This is the typical "I can't believe he's that thick" syndrome, but, hey, all guys go through it.

Loved the 'brushing' parts and Harry's total bewilderment. Hope to see some fun action ... not that kind ... in this. Good work.

HermioneGreen posted a comment on Tuesday 21st March 2006 1:52pm

This was most humorous. What happened with Ron and Luna at the party? are they together now? what was hermione writing in her note book? when will the next lesson be? will hermione make him wait a week or two, or will it be just a day?

Keep up the good work

'Mione

Mr.Intel replied:

All good questions that will be answered in future chapters.   :D

Thanks for the review.

Elfguard48 posted a comment on Sunday 19th March 2006 6:18am

OH PLEASE..You have to do at least one more chapter. This is way to good to leave hanging. I know you wrote do not count on it to be finish. But PLEEASE....(on knees hands in front begging with puppy dog eyes).

UdderPD posted a comment on Saturday 18th March 2006 7:15pm

I must appologise but I thought that I reviewed this the first time that I read it but a quick glacce through the reviews tells me that I didn't. so;

Good start Please continue.

TTFN UdderPD

FenrisWolf posted a comment on Saturday 11th March 2006 12:45pm

Please, by all means continue this! Clueless Harry butting heads with Machiavellian Hermione is always a recipe for hilarity, especially in a light-hearted plot like this one. Poor Harry doesn't really stand a chance....

Bells posted a comment on Saturday 11th March 2006 5:49am

definitely worth something!

BJH posted a comment on Saturday 11th March 2006 5:28am

Nice start. I will echo an earlier review that stated that the vast grfowth in the apparent maturity of Hermione could do with some backstory explaining. Especially given the precept that neither Ron nor Harry has grown that much in the same time.

What does seem to irk me with this story is the apparent portrayal of Ginny. She dates Harry for more than a year, all the while enduring his poor kissing ability then dumps him. And almost immediately she is all over Neville. This behave seems odd. It just doesn't go down well. I hope there is more to it than just her being a shallow fan girl.

BJH

twilliams1797 posted a comment on Saturday 11th March 2006 3:23am

ahhh this has sooo much potential..

jake m posted a comment on Friday 10th March 2006 7:07pm

good good dont give up on it keep writing

e_m_pink posted a comment on Friday 10th March 2006 3:03pm

Woohoo! A real Harry/Hermione fic I can
a) believe in, and
b) enjoy!

Just great. I love the characterisation, the lovely emphasis on our Harry's lack of kissing ability, and Hermione's shrewdness and lack of an All-Encompassing Crush - a quality most, er, kissing instructors seem to possess hand over fist. Hope you get round to writing some more soon, I certainly enjoyed it!

siaru posted a comment on Friday 10th March 2006 6:47am

Okay, this is interesting. Your Hermione here is so subtly-yet-vastly different that her year or so of back-story might be what's blocking you. This is a Hermione who carries herself as Harry's equal, fulfilling her brilliance and apparently ignoring her Muggleborn status as irrelevant. What she can tell of herself and her recent experiences, as filtered past secrecy oaths and confidentiality spells, is bound to be fascinating. Harry's experiences as an Auror Cadet will be bland and straightforward in comparison.

Done right, this one can be a significant extrapolation and exploration, because, as you've presented her here so far, this is a Hermione who will silently but unmistakably demand that Harry finish maturing, growing up his presence into his power, as the price of his place at her side as a life-partner.

Oh, yes, this one is worth something. Take your time, but please do continue.

Logan_MacLeod posted a comment on Friday 10th March 2006 2:39am

I like this story. It has a different feel from the others. Please continue it

Pruthvi posted a comment on Thursday 9th March 2006 4:21pm

Brilliant story... Short but brilliant. No Offence but your other stories ran in to the end but this story is just about going smoothly....

Meg posted a comment on Thursday 9th March 2006 2:06pm

I'd love to see where this goes!

Thanks!

Meg

Ken Warner posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 8:03am

great appetiser - please please please don't just leave it hanging.

Yes, I understand that this is in the great tradition of the "the Lady or the Tiger" etc. but still quite cruel.
Here is wishing you all the positive energy you can handle.
warm regards

cmzanna posted a comment on Wednesday 8th March 2006 5:53am

Just today I had wondered if we'd hear from you soon, since Lent had begun :) it's great to see your name with an update & I, for one, would love to see where you go with this!

Manatheron posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 11:22am

{Snicker}

Nice start, I'll keep an eye out for updates, it looks like it might be worth it.

The Resident posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 7:21am

Looks good to me. I say go for it. I'd be interested in reading about Harry's 'training'. -grin- Seemed a bit rushed, maybe you could fill in some things (background, other interactions, etc. Maybe enough to turn this single chapter in to 2 or 3 before picking up the story at the point the chapter ends. Just offering suggestions. I'm primarily a reader, not a writer. Keep up the good work.

Olafr posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 5:13am

Hmm, you sound rather lukewarm about this. That's a pity as it seems rather nice so far. Not incredibly atypical, but not awkward either - like Goldilocks, just right.

So should you decide to pursue this, I'll be looking forward to reading this with no little anticipation.

Aaran St Vines posted a comment on Tuesday 7th March 2006 3:45am

This is a great start, but it feels like a half of a chapter. I don't mean to insult you; your writing is outstanding. I just want more.

This stands to be a great bit of fluffy and nutritious goodness, and it need the rest of the story.

Waiting for the other wonderful shoe to drop.